Thursday, September 3, 2009

"My Favorite Place."

Jeremiah, Humphrey

English 1101

Mrs. Sharon Aiken

“My Favorite Place.”

       Every one has a favorite place they love to go. Whether it’s snuggled up in your bed, happy and warm or swimming in a pool perhaps, the chilled water pleasing to your skin. I am unable to narrow my favorite place down to a single location if I did it would no longer be my favorite place. I find myself happy when left to my thoughts and imagination. You see my favorite place lye’s somewhere deep with in my mind.

       When I’m there, no matter what’s going on in reality I’m still in control. The world of Creativity is left for me to unfold. At one moment I’m setting at home, bored, just another rainy day when, suddenly I’m crashing through a thick jungle, Foliage smacking in my face.  Umpa the giant elephant on which I ride, screech’s like only a war elephant could. In my mind I smile because I am bored no more. Maybe I’d rather travel the galaxy. No biggie, with a blink of thought I’m a captain of a space ship on a far away scientific expedition so close to a nearby star that intense heat from the radiation causes sweet to bead on my fore head. The anticipation of my next discovery keeps my palms clammy and cold. You see in my mind is where I love to go.

        On the hottest of day’s I have but to sip a class of iced tea, sending me jumping to a snowball fight I had many years ago. An old friend throwing clumps of stinging white straight at my face still sticks fresh in my mind. Maybe a nearly forgotten memory of delicious stake on the Fourth of July week end, causing drool to drip from your lips.  When I’m stressed or thrown into a difficult situation I send myself back to a time when I thought something else was also a daunting feet, but still I pulled through.  When things seem sad and abused I picture happy times like the smell of pop corn and cotton candy from the  fair, childhood excitement I must subdue.

        Whether it is from the need for creativity or the mindset needed for difficult times I go to my favorite place, my brain. A place where I v been everywhere once and nowhere twice. It’s a big place and a small place and place where I fill safe. A place where the coco’s always rich attracting to the taste. It’s where I know I can all ways be me, that is why my mind is my favorite place to go.

 

4 comments:

  1. That was a great essay. You really drew me in and made me think about what you were saying and kept my interest the entire time. The descriptions were great and I didn't see hardly any errors. All in all it was a very well written essay.

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  2. Thanks for the comment. Appreciate you taking the time and reading my blog. Thanks again.

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  3. The writing in this essay was not clear. I didn't understand some of the sentences and there was several miss spelled words such as, lye's in the introduction... correct spelling is lies. The whole essay need revising.

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  4. As appealing as positive comments are, they don't help us develop as a writer (or even get higher grades) as much as those that offer helpful criticism. I'm not sure Lady Africa really "got" what was needed, but I think Micia's English Skills made helpful suggestions.

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